I created this story of Pobble 365. So first I got the Story Starter then I added onto the story. This is what I came up with. I will be creating more blog posts throughout Lockdown, and hopefully Covid-19 will be over soon.
Thursday, August 19, 2021
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Kia ora Olivia,
ReplyDeleteWow, what a fabulous story!
Great use of short sentences "Something terrible. Something powerful." This added a great amount of suspense to your story, ka pai!
Where you said ".... all around him" you need to introduce the captain before using him, for example you could simply say "the captain", once you have done this you can use him/he.
I wonder what will happen next.. this would be a phenomenal story to continue with.
I have given you a digital double AWHI for showing our value of GROW - you have shown enormous growth in your writing over the year, ka pai!
Keep up the great work, Olivia!
Miss Rogers :)