Story starter!
The enormous die crashed into the sand with a thud, but
what number would it land on?
The giants ran after it, craning their necks, jostling with
one another to see what the outcome would be. As they moved across
the beach the ground shook violently, barely able to contain their
mighty weight and size.
Finally, the die came to rest. One of the giants let out an
almighty roar of delight that reverberated for miles around but it landed
on a hill and when they went towards it went rolling down the hill.
What number would it land on? It stopped then whatever number it
landed on was how many weeks till an earthquake. It landed on 1 so
one week till the next earthquake.
1 week passed and all of the giants were ready.
To be continued…
what number would it land on?
one another to see what the outcome would be. As they moved across
the beach the ground shook violently, barely able to contain their
mighty weight and size.
almighty roar of delight that reverberated for miles around but it landed
on a hill and when they went towards it went rolling down the hill.
landed on was how many weeks till an earthquake. It landed on 1 so
one week till the next earthquake.
Sick sentences!
Normal:The giant threw the die. It was really big and had big
black dots on. It landed on the beach and started to roll.
What I changed it to: The enormous giant threw the die. It was
really big and had big black dots on it . It landed on the beach
and started to roll and roll and roll.
black dots on. It landed on the beach and started to roll.
really big and had big black dots on it . It landed on the beach
and started to roll and roll and roll.
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